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Red Hot Light goes to disneyland!

Post  ♥Red Hot Light♥ on Thu Aug 04, 2011 12:42 pm

Chapter 1
Good morning!

One summer morning, Red Hot Light woke up with a joyful feeling. She smiled, got her slippers on, and walked to the dinner table.
Good morning, Mom! What's for breakfast?
Said Red Hot Light.
Good morning. We are having pancakes. But they won't be done for a few more minutes. Why don't you go watch tv for now?
Said Red Hot Light's Mom.
Okay.
Red Hot Light then walked to the living room, and turned on the TV. She watched Spongebob for about 15 minutes until breakfast was ready. All of a sudden, her mom called her.
Red Hot Light! Breakfast is ready!!
Red Hot Light instantly walked happily to the dinner table, and sat down in a chair. She ate for about 20 minutes, then took a shower. After her shower, she went and sat down on the couch, and turned on the TV.

Part 2 coming as soon as i can figure out what to write Razz!!!


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Chapter 2!!!

Post  ♥Red Hot Light♥ on Thu Aug 04, 2011 2:17 pm

Chapter 2
The Surprise

As Red Hot Light started to change the channel, she heard her Mom.
Red Hot Light! Come here!
Said Red Hot Light's mom
Yes ma'am.

Said Red Hot Light.
then Red Hot Light went upstairs.

What do you need, mom?
I have a surprise for you. We have been saving up on money for a few months, and we're going to Disneyland!!
Red Hot Light then gasped in delight as she thought to herself "Disneyland?? that sounds AWESOME!!! Razz"
How long are we staying down there, Mom?
We are staying for 3 days. So make sure to pack enough clothes, if not extra, just in case.
Red ot Light then ran into her room, after grabbing her Red colored suitcase. She giggled until her cheeks hurt! Then Red Hot Light thought "Wow... my first time at Disneyland! I wonder what it's going to be like Surprised...." After a few minutes of finding fashionable outfits and accessories, Red Hot Light then ran downstairs and sat down, waiting for her parents to finish packing.

Chapter 3 coming pretty soon Razz!!!
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Re: Red Hot Light goes to disneyland!

Post  Lightning Pirate on Thu Aug 04, 2011 10:02 pm

These are just my opinions: I don't like how the story is made. All the dialogue are in quotes which make it a little big. And you forgot to use a grammar/spell checker I can see. And when writing stories, make sure you have an exciting plot. The forums are closing soon, too...

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Post  goodlucklight on Fri Aug 05, 2011 6:10 am

Lightning Pirate wrote:These are just my opinions: I don't like how the story is made. All the dialogue are in quotes which make it a little big. And you forgot to use a grammar/spell checker I can see. And when writing stories, make sure you have an exciting plot. The forums are closing soon, too...
WHUUUUTTTTT!?!?!? NAOOOOOOOOO TT-TT TEH FORUMS R CLOSING!!!!
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OHMAGOSHES THE FORUMS ARE CLOSING?!?!

Post  ♥Red Hot Light♥ on Fri Aug 05, 2011 11:42 am

Ohmagoshes are they rly closing down Sad? NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO Sad
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Cant think of anything

Post  ♥Red Hot Light♥ on Fri Aug 05, 2011 12:15 pm

I can't think of anything to write. anyone got any ideas? xD Razz
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