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Ifireworks The Story

Post  Rocks on Mon Jul 04, 2011 9:55 pm

Alia was a young girl, That didn't think of herself all she thought about was fireworks. Alia was always thinking about fireworks. From her 1st 4th day of july to her 6th birthday. She is now 7 and she wants to see the fireworks, But her mom is keeping it from her. Alia one day sneaked out of the house, to the firework show about a day before it. Out of hunger and thurst. All she did was sit there, Finding all the food she could for that one day her mom was gone. She cried for help but no one would come to her. Just then, A person named Jaily Jen came. Jaily looked at Alia Like Alia was hated for an odd reason. "Is there anything wrong? Asked Alia.
"You dont know what your doing? Your out here well your mom is worried sick about you. Alia Jen you march right into that house. Slowly Alia remembered Jailey. "JAILEY! I MISSED YOU SO MUCH" Screamed Alia.
"Enough. Go to your mom NOW." Jailey Yelled. "Ok!" Yelled Alia in joy.. "You will never see the fireworks again Alia." Her mom said. Alia cried. Cried very hard and she was just to sad to do anything.
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Re: Ifireworks The Story

Post  Tay on Tue Jul 12, 2011 9:58 pm

Rocks wrote:
Alia was a young girl, That didn't think of herself all she thought about was fireworks. Alia was always thinking about fireworks. From her 1st 4th day of july to her 6th birthday. She is now 7 and she wants to see the fireworks, But her mom is keeping it from her. Alia one day sneaked out of the house, to the firework show about a day before it. Out of hunger and thurst. All she did was sit there, Finding all the food she could for that one day her mom was gone. She cried for help but no one would come to her. Just then, A person named Jaily Jen came. Jaily looked at Alia Like Alia was hated for an odd reason. "Is there anything wrong? Asked Alia.
"You dont know what your doing? Your out here well your mom is worried sick about you. Alia Jen you march right into that house. Slowly Alia remembered Jailey. "JAILEY! I MISSED YOU SO MUCH" Screamed Alia.
"Enough. Go to your mom NOW." Jailey Yelled. "Ok!" Yelled Alia in joy.. "You will never see the fireworks again Alia." Her mom said. Alia cried. Cried very hard and she was just to sad to do anything.
All the grammar is fine. Nice story..

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